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Working with another person was stress relieving and saved me the troubles of panicking as my partner would keep me grounded, as well as give me reassurance that we would be fine. The process of making a podcast was, in my opinion, complex, as neither she nor I had any experience with making one. Instantly, we both knew to make a script. Due to the fact she has work and I don’t, I chose to start us off with making the introduction and first argument. Within a few days, I’d finished and she managed to read over it, make changes then proceed to complete it with a second argument and conclusion. The workload was split evenly, and her constant positive comments made me not stress out as much as I normally would. Together, we finished a week before the assignment was due and recorded a few times together. I managed to get tongue twisted with a few words which made me feel terrible as we’d sat there for a few recordings., Hhowever, on our last recording before I had to go, she had given me advice to slow down and relax. Her advice worked. The recording was smooth and there were no jumbled words. My partner was then kind enough to insist on uploading the recording and script for me due to the fact she’d recorded it on her phone. I insisted I cite our references then. Together, through email, we exchanged documents and double checked if everything was complete; then she had submitted. Comment by David Sotir: Where is the context that provides background to the reader?Comment by David Sotir: Avoid contractions in academic writing style.Comment by David Sotir: The tine of your reflection is relatively colloquial (informal). When working with a partner, communication was essential to make progress and perfect the podcast to our liking. The wording for the script was jargon and that was a challengeonflict as we tried ourt best to make the podcast sound as if it was airing for the first time. Thus, it was hard to compose an organic conversation and have a natural flow with no abrupt stops. I have a tendency to get distracted and leave things to the last minute. However, due to the deadlines that myself and my partner discussed on due dates for each part, I had managed to complete my half on-time and edit what needed to be fixed. In the future, I would be more vocal about making any more changes or adjusting what I think is a good idea. I would also try to think more outside of the box about trying to dig deeper into analysis. However, due to the little time we were given, it was not possible for me to delve in as deep into the topic as I desired. Comment by David Sotir: What does this mean exactly? Try to be as specific as possible in academic writing. This assessment has definitely changed my worldview on bullying in universities. There are policies and rules established yet I haven’t really seen any action been taken. In fact, I’m amazed that bullying isn’t talked about enough in university as it is a place where people can definitely abuse power over another. As a future health professional, it is vital to ensure each student and staff member is ok through multiple online forms or surveys, as our mental, cognitive, emotional, spiritual and physical health are the pinnacle of our overall wellbeing.Comment by David Sotir: Ungrammatical sentenceComment by David Sotir: ColloquialComment by David Sotir: See above Imaan Jaffri Working with another person was stress relieving and saved me the troubles of panicking as my partner would keep me grounded, as well as give me reassurance that we would be fine. The process of making a podcast was, in my opinion, complex, as neither she nor I had any experience with making one. Instantly, we both knew to make a script. Due to the fact she has work and I don’t, I chose to start us off with making the introduction and first argument. Within a few days, I’d finished and she managed to read over, make changes then proceed to complete it with a second argument and conclusion. The workload was split evenly, and her constant positive comments made me not stress out as much as I normally would. Together, we finished a week before the assignment was due and recorded a few times together. I managed to get tongue twisted with a few words which made me feel terrible as we’d sat there for a few recordings, however, on our last recording before I had to go, she had given me advice to slow down and relax. Her advice worked. The recording was smooth and there were no jumbled words. My partner was then kind enough to insist on uploading the recording and script for me due to the fact she’d recorded on her phone. I insisted I cite our references then. Together, through email, we exchanged documents and double checked if everything was complete then she had submitted. When working with a partner, communication was essential to make progress and perfect the podcast to our liking. The wording for the script was jargon and that was a conflict as we tried out best to make the podcast sound as if it was airing for the first time. Thus, it was hard to compose an organic conversation and have a natural flow with no abrupt stops. I have a tendency to get distracted and leave things to the last minute. However, due to the deadlines that myself and my partner discussed on due dates for each part, I had managed to complete my half on-time and edit what needed to be fixed. In the future, I would be more vocal about making any more changes or adjusting what I think is a good idea. I would also try to think more outside of the box about trying to dig deeper into analysis. However, due to the little time we were given, it was not possible for me to delve in as deep into the topic as I desired. This assessment has definitely changed my worldview on bullying in universities. There are policies and rules established yet I haven’t really seen any action been taken. In fact, I’m amazed that bullying isn’t talked enough in university as it is a place where people can definitely abuse power over another. As a future health professional, it is vital to ensure each student and staff member is ok through multiple online forms or surveys, as our mental, cognitive, emotional, spiritual and physical health are the pinnacle of our overall wellbeing. Imaan Jaffri Overall Feedback & Recommendations · Your written response does not align with the assignment marking rubric and there are certain points that could be addressed more thoroughly. In order to enhance your reflective piece, you are recommended to check the HD descriptors in the marking rubric. The aim of this assessment is to reflect on your performance as a health communicator involved in producing health messaging. This includes comments on group dynamics as well as reflections on the ethical and social implications of reporting on vulnerable communities as well as their own worldviews. · There should be a succinct recount of the collaborative nature of the podcast assessment. In contrast to this, there needs to be deep reflection in which you provide a clear connection between what you have experienced and what you have learned in relation to your skills, professional/personal experience and/or knowledge of the interpersonal communication strategies discussed throughout the teaching session. · There is no explicit evidence of your understanding of differing worldviews in regards to the topic chosen (in your previous assessment), and how this impacts your future career in healthcare. · Not only must your reflective essay demonstrate thorough knowledge and understanding of the topic, it would ideally provide clear evidence of scholarly reading. Academic sources have not been consulted. · Your reflection is written in a colloquial style, inappropriate for an academic genre. You need to use stylistically sophisticated language that is precise and engaging, with notable sense of voice, awareness of audience and purpose, and varied sentence structure. · Your writing also contains a number of errors in grammar. Corrections and suggestions have been provided in track changes and in the comments in your Word document. 95725 – Interpersonal Communication Assessment 4: Interpersonal Reflective Essay. Worth: 20% of final mark. Intent: Students will reflect on their performance as health communicators involved in producing health messaging. This will include comments on group dynamics as well as reflections on the ethical and social implications of reporting on vulnerable communities as well as their own worldviews. Criteria HD – High Distinction D – Distinction C – Credit P – Pass Z – Fail Reporting on context (35%) Provides in-depth context of the project process, and a succinct recount of the collaborative nature of the Podcast assessment. Provides good context of the project process, and a recount of the collaborative nature of the Podcast assessment. Provides some context of the project process, and a recount of the collaborative nature of the Podcast assessment. Provides no context of the project process, and a brief explanation of the collaborative nature of the Podcast assessment. Student fail at completing the requirements for this criterion. A detailed recount of conflict(s) that arose during the process of working in pairs. A detailed recount of conflict(s) that arose during the process of working in pairs. A brief recount of conflict(s) that arose during the process of working in pairs. A brief recount of conflict(s) that arose during the process of working in pairs. Same as above Depth of reflection (40%) Demonstrates a conscious and thorough understanding of challenge(s) faced during the process, including contributing factors. Provides a deep reflection on how and why this may have changed. Demonstrates a conscious understanding of challenge(s) faced during the process, including contributing factors. Provides a deep reflection on how and why this may have changed. Demonstrates some understanding of challenge(s) faced during the process, including contributing factors. Provides a superficial reflection on how and why this may have changed. Demonstrates little understanding of challenge(s) faced during the process, including contributing factors. Provides little to no reflection on how and why this changed. Same as above Provides a clear connection between what they have experienced and what they have learned in relation to their skills, professional/personal experience