Please correct my assignments i need it urgently with apa formal and all the citations please
research essay by Nancy Nancy Submission date: 24-Mar-2022 11:59PM (UTC-0400) Submission ID: 1792407044 File name: research_essay_assignment.docx (20.48K) Word count: 1390 Character count: 7408 1 1 1 1 1 1 4 5 8 Title page needed page # Sp. Double space Indent -> 1 Citation Needed 1 1 1 1 1 1 1 4 Citation Needed 2 Citation Needed Avoid Contractions 1 1 1 2 3 3 1 1 1 1 2 3 Citation Needed Citation Needed 4 Citation Needed 1 1 1 5 You've put quite a lot of effort into this essay Nancy, and you have some great points to make about cyberbullying, but this is an automatic fail I'm afraid for three major reasons: 1. This is not formatted as an argumentative essay unfortunately. You do not have a thesis here, which means that although you explore lots of aspects about cyberbullying, there is little to tie them together. Please Craft an 'although, claim, because' thesis (ie: "Cyberbullying affects adolescents in the following three ways, a,b,c..."), include it in your introduction, then try to organize your work so that it flows logically from point to point; create concise paragraphs where all of the information contained within is on one specific topic. Argue each issue fully, provide evidence for your argument (statistics, quotes etc.), then relate it back to your thesis at the end of the paragraph. 2. You have no in-text citations at all in this essay ie: (Glazzard, 2019), which means it could be considered plagiarism. You need to have in-text citations to show your work. Your paraphrasing is also of a poor quality, as you have taken large sections without proper referencing directly from the source material, especially toward the end. 3. This is not formatted to Georgian College standards in any way (font size, paragraphing, indentation, title page, reference format) which means it is not up to the appropriate standard unfortunately. It also has numerous spelling and grammatical issues which needed to be edited out. So overall, although you make some good points, this is quite far away from what is needed for an argumentative essay at the college level Nancy, I'm afraid. Please get in touch with me so we can get you some extra help to re-write this essay ahead of your final submission. 3 4 6 7 7 43% SIMILARITY INDEX 41% INTERNET SOURCES 21% PUBLICATIONS 25% STUDENT PAPERS 1 23% 2 8% 3 6% 4 2% 5 1% 6 1% 7 1% 8 1% research essay ORIGINALITY REPORT PRIMARY SOURCES www.intechopen.com Internet Source peggy991.com Internet Source globalnews.ca Internet Source mars.gmu.edu Internet Source Submitted to University of Ulster Student Paper nedc.com.au Internet Source www.researchgate.net Internet Source dollupweb.bizzsmartz.com Internet Source Exclude quotes Off Exclude bibliography Off Exclude matches Off QM QM QM FINAL GRADE 2/10 research essay GRADEMARK REPORT GENERAL COMMENTS Instructor PAGE 1 Text Comment. Title page needed Text Comment. page # Sp. Spelling error Text Comment. Double space Text Comment. Indent -> Comment 1 Where is your thesis? Citation Needed Cite Source: Please use the link below to find links to information regarding specific citation styles: http://www.plagiarism.org/plag_article_citation_styles.html PAGE 2 Citation Needed Cite Source: Please use the link below to find links to information regarding specific citation styles: QM QM QM QM QM http://www.plagiarism.org/plag_article_citation_styles.html Comment 2 ?? Bullying? Citation Needed Cite Source: Please use the link below to find links to information regarding specific citation styles: http://www.plagiarism.org/plag_article_citation_styles.html Avoid Contractions Avoid Contractions: Words like Can't, Won't or Don't should be edited out of academic work. PAGE 3 Comment 3 Where are your citations? PAGE 4 Citation Needed Cite Source: Please use the link below to find links to information regarding specific citation styles: http://www.plagiarism.org/plag_article_citation_styles.html Citation Needed Cite Source: Please use the link below to find links to information regarding specific citation styles: http://www.plagiarism.org/plag_article_citation_styles.html Comment 4 Improper paraphrasing here. This is exactly the same as your source material. Citation Needed Cite Source: Please use the link below to find links to information regarding specific citation styles: http://www.plagiarism.org/plag_article_citation_styles.html PAGE 5 Comment 5 This also is very similar to your source material. Text Comment. You've put quite a lot of effort into this essay Nancy, and you have some great points to make about cyberbullying, but this is an automatic fail I'm afraid for three major reasons: 1. This is not formatted as an argumentative essay unfortunately. You do not have a thesis here, which means that although you explore lots of aspects about cyberbullying, there is little to tie them together. Please Craft an 'although, claim, because' thesis (ie: "Cyberbullying affects adolescents in the following three ways, a,b,c..."), include it in your introduction, then try to organize your work so that it flows logically from point to point; create concise paragraphs where all of the information contained within is on one specific topic. Argue each issue fully, provide evidence for your argument (statistics, quotes etc.), then relate it back to your thesis at the end of the paragraph. 2. You have no in-text citations at all in this essay ie: (Glazzard, 2019), which means it could be considered plagiarism. You need to have in-text citations to show your work. Your paraphrasing is also of a poor quality, as you have taken large sections without proper referencing directly from the source material, especially toward the end. 3. This is not formatted to Georgian College standards in any way (font size, paragraphing, indentation, title page, reference format) which means it is not up to the appropriate standard unfortunately. It also has numerous spelling and grammatical issues which needed to be edited out. So overall, although you make some good points, this is quite far away from what is needed for an argumentative essay at the college level Nancy, I'm afraid. Please get in touch with me so we can get you some extra help to re-write this essay ahead of your final submission. PAGE 6 Strikethrough. Comment 7 Please format to APA Strikethrough.