Instructions
Think of a part of your narrative essay that you want to emphasize with description. Try to visualize this moment as well as you can. Think not only of what you saw but also what you heard, felt, and smelled. Then write that part of your rough draft, taking care to recreate those sensory experiences with words as best you can. Help your readers imagine what that experience was like for you.
If I were tasked with this assignment, here's what I would write:
The world outside became simultaneously hyperreal and muted. My senses felt heightened, but my surroundings were still drowned out by the overwhelming sensations tearing my insides. The lights seemed so much brighter, the colors uncomfortably vivid. Human shapes darted around me, but I could not focus on who they were. The familiar theme song ofThe Price is Rightemanated from the hospital room TV, mixing with the beeps of the nearby monitors. George Gray invited a contestant to "Come on down!"Come on down, indeed,little girl, I thought.
Someone barked for me to push, as if I needed to be told. The pain ripped through my lower back, alternately ebbing momentarily to tolerable levels and surging until I thought my body was going to split apart. Pushing eased the pain some, but my body gave me no breaks. As soon as one wave of pain crested, the next followed immediately behind it.
You must write at least 100 words, but you may certainly write more. (The more of your draft you write now, the less you have to write later!) My example, for reference, is 152 words.